It’s always good to introduce your hero doing something active. If this takes the form of a physical competition, or even just hitting on someone, then it’s good to show your hero lose in a way that hints at their overall flaw, without calling attention to that fact at the time.
The hero will still not realize he or she has this flaw, and the reader may not realize it as well, but for both the hero and the reader, when the big flaw is finally confronted at around the ¾ point of the story, the fact that this first loss also traces back to this flaw will resonate. Eventually, we want your hero to realize that he or she must overcome this flaw in order to defeat the antagonist and/or win over another character.
Don’t begin by highlighting the wrong flaw, because that can get you on the wrong track. In one book I read for my notes service, the hero lost the competition in the first scene because he was distracted by a woman, conditioning us to think that this will be a problem throughout the book. But this didn’t turn out to be the hero’s flaw. His flaw was that he was too contemptuous and snobby. If he had lost the match because he had too little respect for his opponent, that would have set up the rest of the story better.
Let’s go back to Raiders of the Lost Ark. Indy begins by trying to replace a religious idol with a bag of sand, because he doesn’t see any difference, but the altar can tell the difference, and it triggers all sorts of booby traps that delay him long enough for Belloq to steal the idol. It’s not obvious to us or him at the time that this speaks to his overall flaw, his lack of respect for spirituality, but it subconsciously sets us up for the for the moment when he overcomes his big flaw to “win” at the end (simply by closing his eyes out of reverence.)
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Tuesday, September 12, 2017
Sunday, September 10, 2017
Storyteller’s Rulebook: Let Us Guess From a Character’s Introduction How Important He or She is Going to Be
A character enters the room. You write, “The door opens. Everybody turns to look. In steps a quietly commanding figure, Sergeant Elias Quartermain, son and grandson of generals and destined to make it himself someday. Three women break away from their conversations to sidle up to him, but he brushes past them all.” Then we never hear from this character again. Don’t do that.
On the other hand, you’ll have this: “I was taken down to the command room where I met analysts named Adamson, Bowers, Cahill, and Dumont. They all shook my hand and then we turned our attention to the briefing.” Then, by the time the book is over, Bowers turns out to be the love interest. Don’t do that either.
As I mentioned here, audiences want to keep track of as few characters as possible. Every time you introduce a character, you’re asking your reader for a favor, “Sorry, but I’ve got yet another character I want you to remember and keep track of.” Audiences are always looking for permission to lose track of a character.
When they read the first intro above, they think “Oh boy, I’d better clear out a bunch of head space to keep track of Quartermain, even if it means forgetting about some of the earlier characters.” When they read the second intro, they think, “Oh good, these four analysts are not being given any distinguishing characteristics, so I don’t have to keep track of them. Their four names can go in one ear and out the other.” Then later, when Bowers becomes more and more important, they’ll think “Wait, who is this guy, did we meet him before? I forget, let me flip back…” Trust me, your readers will be pissed with you if they have to flip back.
Let us guess correctly how important a character is going to be. Don’t bother to name Sgt. Quartermain if he’s never going to be mentioned again, and if your heroine is going to fall in love with one of those four analysts, have him stand out when he’s introduced. You don’t have to mention how hot he is or tip off the fact that he’ll be the love interest, but at least give him a little character note, so we’ll (begrudgingly) remember who he is later.
On the other hand, you’ll have this: “I was taken down to the command room where I met analysts named Adamson, Bowers, Cahill, and Dumont. They all shook my hand and then we turned our attention to the briefing.” Then, by the time the book is over, Bowers turns out to be the love interest. Don’t do that either.
As I mentioned here, audiences want to keep track of as few characters as possible. Every time you introduce a character, you’re asking your reader for a favor, “Sorry, but I’ve got yet another character I want you to remember and keep track of.” Audiences are always looking for permission to lose track of a character.
When they read the first intro above, they think “Oh boy, I’d better clear out a bunch of head space to keep track of Quartermain, even if it means forgetting about some of the earlier characters.” When they read the second intro, they think, “Oh good, these four analysts are not being given any distinguishing characteristics, so I don’t have to keep track of them. Their four names can go in one ear and out the other.” Then later, when Bowers becomes more and more important, they’ll think “Wait, who is this guy, did we meet him before? I forget, let me flip back…” Trust me, your readers will be pissed with you if they have to flip back.
Let us guess correctly how important a character is going to be. Don’t bother to name Sgt. Quartermain if he’s never going to be mentioned again, and if your heroine is going to fall in love with one of those four analysts, have him stand out when he’s introduced. You don’t have to mention how hot he is or tip off the fact that he’ll be the love interest, but at least give him a little character note, so we’ll (begrudgingly) remember who he is later.
Wednesday, September 06, 2017
Storyteller’s Rulebook: Sometimes It's Better to Humanize Than Incentivize
This is a rule that James mentioned in our sixth podcast, and I thought I should give it its own post.
In Raiders of the Lost Ark, Indiana Jones begins the story with a very standard social humiliation, losing the idol he just found to another archaeologist. He then returns home to his university empty-handed, only to find out about an intimidating opportunity to redeem himself when the government comes around and asks him to find the ark of the covenant. First, however, he hangs out with his friend and senior colleague Brody.
As James pointed out, if you were writing strictly according to how a guru told you to write, it would tempting to pile on another humiliation and escalation here. Brody could be critical of Indiana coming back empty-handed, and even tell him that he’ll be fired if the doesn’t bring back something better soon. On paper, that sounds like a good idea. The hero now has more motivation for the story going forward and bigger emotions (more humiliation) to deal with. So why not?
Because it’s more important to humanize Indy at this point. Let him be a human being for a few scenes, won’t you? Give him a nice normal friendship and some comfort. You’ve already started your story off with a bang, so your audience should be willing to put up with a few scenes of downtime before we launch back into the big conflict.
Don’t get me wrong, downtime is risky, and under-motivation is deadly, but if you’ve earned a breather, take it. We want to like Indy, and so we want to see that at least one other person likes Indy.
(After writing this, I remembered that two of my very first posts seven years ago were on the dangers of over-motivation. This is a good example of a movie that avoided that problem.)
In Raiders of the Lost Ark, Indiana Jones begins the story with a very standard social humiliation, losing the idol he just found to another archaeologist. He then returns home to his university empty-handed, only to find out about an intimidating opportunity to redeem himself when the government comes around and asks him to find the ark of the covenant. First, however, he hangs out with his friend and senior colleague Brody.
As James pointed out, if you were writing strictly according to how a guru told you to write, it would tempting to pile on another humiliation and escalation here. Brody could be critical of Indiana coming back empty-handed, and even tell him that he’ll be fired if the doesn’t bring back something better soon. On paper, that sounds like a good idea. The hero now has more motivation for the story going forward and bigger emotions (more humiliation) to deal with. So why not?
Because it’s more important to humanize Indy at this point. Let him be a human being for a few scenes, won’t you? Give him a nice normal friendship and some comfort. You’ve already started your story off with a bang, so your audience should be willing to put up with a few scenes of downtime before we launch back into the big conflict.
Don’t get me wrong, downtime is risky, and under-motivation is deadly, but if you’ve earned a breather, take it. We want to like Indy, and so we want to see that at least one other person likes Indy.
(After writing this, I remembered that two of my very first posts seven years ago were on the dangers of over-motivation. This is a good example of a movie that avoided that problem.)
Tuesday, September 05, 2017
Podcast Episode 6: Raiders of the Story Circle
Hey guys, it’s been a long time since we put up a new podcast episode, hasn’t it? Well we’re back, baby! In this episode we start off by comparing my structure to Dan Harmon’s Story Circle, then we basically just end up talking about Raiders of the Lost Ark for a long ass time, so long that this is our second longest episode, and it doesn’t even have a free story idea! Nevertheless, I think you’ll like it.
Lots of links this time around:
Lots of links this time around:
- NEW FOR THIS EPISODE, I’ve expanded my classic structure guru concordance to include Dan Harmon’s story circle and Film Crit Hulk’s five act structure (which we never get around to discussing)
- Here are my massive charts of how 50 movies line up to my structure.
- http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_101:_Super_Basic_Shit
- http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_102:_Pure,_Boring_Theory
- http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_103:_Let%27s_Simplify_Before_Moving_On
- http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_104:_The_Juicy_Details
- http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_105:_How_TV_is_Different
- http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_106:_Five_Minute_Pilots
- http://danharmon.tumblr.com/post/57779240046/could-you-explain-your-story-breaking-process
- http://danharmon.tumblr.com/post/57889437682/could-you-explain-a-particular-community-episode
Monday, September 04, 2017
Monday, August 21, 2017
Weeds: The Archive
Our final TV show archive! Thanks for putting up with me as I archive all these old posts. The upside is that I didn’t take the summer off like I usually do.
- The Ultimate Pilot Story Checklist: Weeds
- Straying from the Party Line: The Lack of a POV Character in Weeds (and Why Satire Must be Center-Cut)
- Rulebook Casefile: Potential Energy in the “Weeds” Pilot
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Strong Metaphors Aren’t 1 to 1
- Storyteller's Rulebook: Know and Show the Bad Reasons
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Great TV Heroes Should Be Self-Aware, But Not as Much as They Think They Are
Sunday, August 20, 2017
Transparent: The Archive
A brilliant show.
- The Ultimate Pilot Story Checklist: Transparent
- Straying from the Party Line: Transparent and the New Reality of Streaming
- Rulebook Casefile: The Masterful Subtext of Transparent
- Storyteller's Rulebook: Let Words Belie Actions (But Make Sure We Notice)
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Let the Listener Rewrite the Scene
- Rulebook Casefile: Showing Off a Spectrum of Moods in the “Transparent” Pilot
Thursday, August 17, 2017
The Sopranos: The Archive
Lots of good stuff here, especially the Masterful Weave breakdown.
- The Ultimate Pilot Checklist: The Sopranos
- Rulebook Casefile: The Masterful Weave of The Sopranos Pilot
- Rulebook Casefile: The Short-Lived Framing Sequence in the Sopranos Pilot
- Straying from the Party Line: Separating Plot and Character Scenes in the Sopranos Pilot
- Rulebook Casefile: Details from Life, from Research, and from Imagination in the Sopranos Pilot
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Add Realism, But Don’t Subtract Unrealism
- The Hero Project #9: Freud and Jung and Tony and Don
- Hero Personality Profiles, Part 2: The Underappreciated
- Storyteller’s Rulebook #7: Movies Are About Change, TV is About Fate
- Storyteller’s Rulebook #41: Drama Is How It Is, Genre Is How It Feels
- Storyteller’s Rulebook #152: Give Every Hero a Part of Yourself
Wednesday, August 16, 2017
Scandal: The Archive
A great pilot that’s worth studying.
- The Ultimate Pilot Story Checklist: Scandal
- Rulebook Casefile: Swiftly Differentiating the Ensemble on “Scandal”
- Rulebook Casefile: Art vs. Entertainment in the “Scandal” Pilot
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Use Ironic Set-Up and Pay-Off Dialogue
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Hypocrisy Can Build Sympathy
- Straying from the Party Line: Overdoing the Ticking Clock in the “Scandal” Pilot
- Rulebook Casefile: The Effortless Moment of Humanity in the “Scandal” Pilot
Tuesday, August 15, 2017
Modern Family: The Archive
I had a lot to say about what this show does wrong and what it does right.
- The Ultimate Pilot Story Checklist: Modern Family
- Straying from the Party Line: The Failure to Bring Different Classes Together on Modern Family
- Storyteller’s Rulebook: Stay on the Edge of Edgy
- Rulebook Casefile: Backstory vs. Front Story on Modern Family
- Rulebook Casefile: Generating Empathy in Modern Family (as Opposed to Trophy Wife)
- Straying from the Party Line: Co-Equal Heroes in the Modern Family
- Rulebook Casefile: Concise Comedy in Modern Family
- Storyteller's Rulebook #129: Comedy Requires Pain
- The Ironic Statement of Theme on "Community"
Monday, August 14, 2017
Mad Men: The Archive
My all-time favorite show. I miss it badly.
- The Ultimate TV Pilot Checklist: Mad Men
- Straying from the Party Line: “Mad Men”
- Rulebook Casefile: The Importance of Being Good at Your Job in “Mad Men”
- Rulebook Casefile: How “Mad Men” Creates Its Own Sense of Right and Wrong
- The Hero Project #9: Freud and Jung and Tony and Don
- Storyteller’s Rulebook #42: People Only Want What They Want
- Storyteller’s Rulebook #96: The Difference Between Literature and Entertainment
- How to Create a TV Show, Part 15: Establish the Philosophy And/Or Theme
Sunday, August 13, 2017
How I Met Your Mother: The Archive
Yes, I wrote all these before the finale but I’d do it all over again because I thought the finale was brilliant, heartbreaking, honest TV. If you hadn’t figured out the mom was dead years in advance I don’t even know what show you were watching.
- The Ultimate TV Pilot Checklist: How I Met Your Mother
- Straying From the Party Line: How I Met Your Mother
- Rulebook Casefile: The Vainglorious Moment of Humanity in “How I Met Your Mother”
- Rulebook Casefile: Unique Point of Entry in “How I Met Your Mother”
- Storyteller’s Rulebook #206: Have a Reversible Metaphor
- Finally: the Corrected Statement of Philosophy on "How I Met Your Mother"
Thursday, August 10, 2017
Community: The Archive
How many of these people are starring in their own shows right now? (I guess Joel McHale and Danny Pudi’s new shows just got cancelled, but Brie, Olver, Glover and Jacobs are going strong.)
Wednesday, August 09, 2017
Cheers: The Archive
This was one of the first ones I did, back when I didn’t do as many posts about each one. I should go back and add some more at some point. There’s certainly no shortage of things to say about this great pilot.
Tuesday, August 08, 2017
Monday, August 07, 2017
Breaking Bad: The Archive
I’ve had a lot to say about this show over the years, partially because it was I was blogging almost the whole time it was on.
- The Ultimate Pilot Checklist: Breaking Bad
- Straying from the Party Line: The Lack of Hard Choices in “Breaking Bad”
- Straying from the Party Line: Sacrificing the Other Characters In Favor of the Lead in “Breaking Bad”
- Storytellers Rulebook: Save Your Flashforwards For Stories With (Initially) Passive Heroes
- How to Build a Scene: Evaluating every scene in one episode of Breaking Bad
- How to Build a Scene, Epilogue: Mix and Match
- Storyteller's Rulebook #126: Some Scenes are More Ambitious Than Others (Further evaluating every scene from that episode)
- Rulebook Casefile: Empathy Lost and Regained on “Breaking Bad”
- Rulebook Casefile: Everything and the Kitchen Sink in the “Breaking Bad” Pilot Script
- Storyteller's Rulebook #124: Every Scene is a Mini-Movie
Sunday, August 06, 2017
24: The Archive
No, I’m not going to update these TV checklists, just archive the posts, if that’s okay. Can we all pretend the most recent season of this show never happened? Good!
- The Ultimate TV Pilot Checklist: 24
- Straying From the Party Line: 24
- How to Create a TV Show, Addendum: Create Sparks
- Rulebook Casefile: Character Descriptions in the “24” Pilot Script
- Rulebook Casefile: Predicting National Pain in “24”
- Storyteller’s Rulebook Follow-Up: A Hero Split In Two
- How to Alienate An Audience, Part 4: The Hero Agrees with Everybody
Thursday, August 03, 2017
Film School Confidential: The Archive
Don’t go to Film School, folks! There’s a fair amount of anti-MFA stuff in the book, but there used to be a lot more before we slimmed the autobiographical element. Here it is in all its gory glory. Feel my rage!
- Film School Confidential, Part 1: A Confession
- Film School Confidential, Part 2: It’s Worse than Nothing
- Film School Confidential, Part 3: It Feeds Your Worst Instincts
- Film School Confidential, Part 4: You're The Whale
- Film School Confidential, Conclusion: Instead of Film School, Listen to the Crickets
Wednesday, August 02, 2017
Mackendrick's Rules: The Archive
Writer-director
Alexander Mackendrick made underrated movies such as The Man in the White Suit, then became a revered film professor
and published a great book called “On
Filmmaking.” Commenter
J.S. found a list of 41 Mackendrick truisms online, so I spent a few days discussing how those excellent rules lined up with my own advice...
Tuesday, August 01, 2017
Beyond Good Vs. Sucky: The Archive
This was my very first attempt to break down writing into different categories and give a list of advice on each. Still lots of good stuff here.
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