In this true story, Micky Ward is a would-be prizefighter in Lowell, Massachusetts, held back by his exploitative family: mother Alice, brother Dicky (both brothers spell their names without an “e”), and seven heckling sisters. Dicky used to be a boxing hopeful himself but he’s now a crack addict. Micky finally breaks away when he starts dating a brash barmaid named Charlene. After Dicky goes to prison, Micky agrees to work with new people who give him two conditions: “No Dicky, No Alice.” He finally starts to win, but once Dicky is released, Micky starts taking his advice again, and, to everyone’s surprise, it helps, so he finally forces Charlene, Alice, Dicky, and his new cornermen to work together, allowing him to win the championship.
PART
#1: CONCEPT 18/19
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The Pitch: Does this concept excite everyone who
hears about it?
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Is the
one sentence description uniquely appealing?
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The inspiring true story of a boxer who breaks free
of his explotative family to become a champion.
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Does
the concept contain an intriguing ironic contradiction?
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Sort of: a gentle boxer lacks self-esteem.
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Is this a story anyone can identify with, projected onto
a bigger canvas, with higher stakes?
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Very much so.
We all have to break free of our families in order to succeed.
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Story Fundamentals: Will this concept generate a
strong story?
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Is the
concept simple enough to spend more time on character than plot?
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Yes.
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Is
there one character that the audience will choose to be their “hero”?
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Mickey.
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Does
the story follow the progress of the hero’s problem, not the hero’s daily
life?
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Yes. It begins when he realizes that his family is the problem,
and ends when they reconcile with his girlfriend. They could have gone further to show Micky’s most famous
fights, but they don’t, because that’s outside the scope of the problem.
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Does
the story present a unique relationship?
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Yes, a boxer and his crackhead
brother.
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Is at
least one actual human being opposed to what the hero is doing?
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Yes, his new girlfriend won’t let him screw himself
over any more.
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Does
this challenge represent the hero’s greatest hope and/or greatest fear and/or
an ironic answer to the hero’s question?
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Greatest hope: he becomes champion and ultimately
doesn’t have to give up either side of his life.
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Does
something inside the hero have a particularly volatile reaction to the
challenge?
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He’s ready to snap when the movie begins.
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Does
this challenge become something that is the not just hard for the hero to do (an obstacle) but hard for the hero
to want to do (a conflict)?
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Very much so.
He can’t stand the thought of choosing between his family and his
girlfriend.
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In the
end, is the hero the only one who can solve the problem?
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Not really.
He’s fairly passive, and many of the breakthroughs are forced upon
him: he dad makes him ask Charlene out, Charlene forces him to make good on
that, his new handlers force him to cut his family out… Most importantly,
Charlene and Dicky make peace without him.
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Does
the hero permanently transform the situation and vice versa?
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Yes.
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The
Hook: Will this be marketable and generate word of mouth?
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Does
the story satisfy the basic human urges that get people to buy and recommend
this genre?
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Very much so: All four sub-genres (Boxing,
addiction, romance, family drama) end heroically.
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Does
this story show us at least one image we haven’t seen before (that can be
used to promote the final product)?
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Not really.
This is frequently a problem with dramas.
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Is
there at least one “Holy Crap!” scene (to create word of mouth)?
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Sort of.
Amy Adams cursing like a sailor.
Dicky jumping out the window.
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Does
the story contain a surprise that is not obvious from the beginning?
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Very much so: Micky needs Dicky after all.
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Is the
story marketable without revealing the surprise?
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Yes.
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Is the
conflict compelling and ironic both before and after the surprise?
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Very much so.
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PART
#2: CHARACTER 21/22
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Believe:
Do we recognize the hero as a human being?
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Does
the hero have a moment of humanity early on? (A funny, or kind, or oddball,
or out-of-character, or comically vain, or unique-but-universal “I thought I
was the only one who did that!” moment?)
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He joke-fights with his brother while paving
streets, then high-fives some black people, kisses a mentally challenged kid.
Funny: you gotta pay them to shut up.
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Is the
hero defined by ongoing actions and attitudes, not by backstory?
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Well, he, his whole family, and really his whole
town is defined by his brother’s backstory (while Micky doesn’t really have
one of his own), but the fact that Micky puts up with that actually does a
good job of defining him.
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Does
the hero have a well-defined public identity?
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The stepping stone.
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Does
the surface characterization ironically contrast with a hidden interior self?
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He’s ready to break out.
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Does
the hero have a consistent metaphor family (drawn from his or her job,
background, or developmental state)?
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Family: The first thing he says to Charlene is “You’re
Kenny Fleming’s sister”. Everybody is defined by family. Gentleman: “Be nice! Be respectful!
Don’t disrespect her!”
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Does
the hero have a default personality trait?
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Meek, quiet, humble, seething
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Does
the hero have a default argument tactic?
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Shrugs, gives up, and mutters his dissent
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Is the
hero’s primary motivation for tackling this challenge strong, simple, and
revealed early on?
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Sort of, he wants to be a champion, but he’ll
sacrifice his chances to make money for his family. In the end, though, he realizes that that’s a sickness,
and the best way to help them is to pursue his own self-interest.
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Care:
Do we feel for the hero?
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Does
the hero start out with a shortsighted or wrongheaded philosophy (or accept a
false piece of advice early on)?
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He starts out with the right boxing philosophy, but
he says about his brother, “Nobody pushes me harder.” That’s wrong.
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Does
the hero have a false or shortsighted goal in the first half?
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Win the fight against Saul Mamby.
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Does
the hero have an open fear or anxiety about his or her future, as well as a
hidden, private fear?
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Open: That he’s a stepping stone, that his family is
holding him back. Hidden: That
he can’t succeed without them.
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Is the
hero physically and emotionally vulnerable?
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Very much so.
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Does
the hero have at least one untenable great flaw we empathize with? (but…)
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He’s too selfless.
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Invest:
Can we trust the hero to tackle this challenge?
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…Is that great flaw (ironically) the natural
flip-side of a great strength we admire?
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He’s loyal to and trusts all of those he loves.
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Is the
hero curious?
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Yes, he studies his future opponents, etc.
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Is the
hero generally resourceful?
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No. He has to
be prodded into everything and shown how to do it.
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Does
the hero have rules he or she lives by (either stated or implied)?
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“I’m no
stepping stone, that’s not who I am, the next one’s gonna show who I am.”
Nobody better mess with my family. “I’m gonna pick my punches.” “I’m a boxer,
not a brawler.”
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Is the
hero surrounded by people who sorely lack his or her most valuable quality?
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Everybody, even Charlene, is loud but he’s quiet. Nobody else has his earning
potential.
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…And
is the hero willing to let them know that, subtly or directly?
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Yes and no.
He’s very reluctant to, but he speaks up for himself at several key
points.
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Is the
hero already doing something active when we first meet him or her?
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He’s paving and sparring.
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Does
the hero have (or claim) decision-making authority?
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He has it, but he disclaims it.
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Does
the hero use pre-established special skills from his or her past to solve
problems (rather than doing what anybody would do)?
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Yes, he learned his boxing philosophy as a
child.
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PART
#3: STRUCTURE (If the story is about the solving of a large problem) 19/21
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1st
Quarter: Is the challenge laid out in the first quarter?
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When
the story begins, is the hero becoming increasingly irritated about his or
her longstanding social problem (while still in denial about an internal
flaw)?
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Longstanding social problem: Can’t get good fights,
trainer never shows up. Denied
flaw: His attachment to his
family is the problem.
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Does
this problem become undeniable due to a social humiliation at the beginning
of the story?
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Dicky doesn’t show up, he’s forced into a bad fight,
loses brutally.
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Does
the hero discover an intimidating opportunity to fix the problem?
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He meets Charlene.
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Does
the hero hesitate until the stakes are raised?
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He ditches out of their first date.
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Does the hero commit to pursuing the opportunity by the
end of the first quarter?
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She pursues him and they hook up.
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2nd
Quarter: Does the hero try the easy way in the second quarter?
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Does
the hero’s pursuit of the opportunity quickly lead to an unforeseen conflict
with another person?
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His family doesn’t approve of her.
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Does
the hero try the easy way throughout the second quarter?
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He keeps them apart, tries to stick with Dicky
despite her advice.
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Does
the hero have a little fun and get excited about the possibility of success?
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They have a strong relationship. They have a family
dinner to celebrate an upcoming fight.
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Does the
easy way lead to a big crash around the midpoint, resulting in the loss of a
safe space and/or sheltering relationship?
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Dicky gets arrested outside, Micky goes to help,
gets hand busted.
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3rd
Quarter: Does the hero try the hard way in the third quarter?
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Does
the hero try the hard way from this point on?
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He finally tries to make it without Dicky.
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Does
the hero find out who his or her real friends and real enemies are?
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Yes, he realizes that he should trust Charlene more
than his family.
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Do the
stakes, pace, and motivation all escalate at this point?
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Yes, he starts winning fights.
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Does
the hero learn from mistakes in a painful way?
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Watching the documentary is painful for all. Breaking with Alice is painful.
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Does a
further setback lead to a spiritual crisis?
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It’s not so much a setback as a dangerous bit of
success: he takes good advice from Dicky, putting him back in danger of
falling into his old ways.
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4th
Quarter: Does the challenge climax in the fourth quarter?
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Does
the hero adopt a corrected philosophy after the spiritual crisis?
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I want you both in my corner
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After
that crisis, does the hero finally commit to pursuing a corrected goal, which
still seems far away?
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Yes, he realizes that he’ll have to force his new
handlers to allow Dicky back in.
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Before
the final quarter of the story begins, (if not long before) has your hero
switched to being proactive, instead of reactive?
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Very
briefly, when he demands that they all work together, but once he does that,
they do the work of working out their differences and leading him to the championship.
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Despite
these proactive steps, is the timeline unexpectedly moved up, forcing the
hero to improvise for the finale?
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No. The fight
happens on schedule with lots of advance word.
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Do all
strands of the story and most of the characters come together for the
climactic confrontation?
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Yes, they’re all there at the fight.
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Does
the hero’s inner struggle climax shortly after (or possible at the same time
as) his or her outer struggle?
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Quite a bit before.
The last 15 minutes of this movie “roll downhill” a little bit, as
Mickey solves his problems out of the ring well before the last fight.
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Is
there an epilogue/ aftermath/ denouement in which the challenge is finally
resolved (or succumbed to), and we see how much the hero has changed
(possibly through reversible behavior)
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Interview, Dicky says, “He put Lowell back on the
map.” Micky says “We”. “Who’s
the pride of Lowell now? Right here.” Points at Micky. “I gotta go.”
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PART
#4: SCENEWORK 19/20 (Micky and Charlene confront Micky’s family about his career.)
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The
Set-Up: Does this scene begin with the essential elements it needs?
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Were
tense and/or hopeful (and usually false) expectations for this interaction
established beforehand?
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Everybody is extremely tense. We’ve seen the sisters turn the mom
against Micky.
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Does
the scene eliminate small talk and repeated beats by cutting out the
beginning (or possibly even the middle)?
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Yes, we begin after they’ve been waiting for Alice
for a while.
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Is
this an intimidating setting that keeps characters active?
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This is the mom’s bear cave and everybody is scared
of her there. Also having seven
angry sisters there.
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Is one
of the scene partners not planning to have this conversation (and quite
possibly has something better to do)?
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Yes and no, they’ve all planned to be there, but
they’d all rather be anywhere else.
Alice has planned on ignoring Charlene but isn’t allowed to.
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Is
there at least one non-plot element complicating the scene?
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The sisters’ nicknames.
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Does
the scene establish its own mini-ticking-clock (if only through subconscious
anticipation)?
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They’re all committed to staying until they reach a
deal, but the subconscious ticking clock that they’re all aware of is
Mickey’s ever-faltering resolve, which will collapse if they can wear him out
long enough.
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The
Conflict: Do the conflicts play out in a lively manner?
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Does this scene both advance the plot and reveal
character through emotional reactions?
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For
everyone.
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Does
the audience have (or develop) a rooting interest in this scene (which may
sometimes shift)?
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We are rooting for Charlene to break Micky free of
Dicky and Alice.
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Are
two agendas genuinely clashing (rather than merely two personalities)?
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Very much so.
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Does
the scene have both a surface conflict and a suppressed conflict (one of
which is the primary conflict in this scene)?
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Surface conflict: Why has Micky been hard to get a
hold of? Who is Charlene? Suppressed conflict: Will Alice and Dicky stay on
as manager and trainer?
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Is the
suppressed conflict (which may or may not come to the surface) implied
through subtext (and/or called out by the other character)?
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The Vegas offer is brought up instead of saying that
Alice and Dicky are taking his money.
Charlene is called an “MTV girl” before she forces them to define
that.
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Are the
characters cagy (or in denial) about their own feelings?
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All except Charlene.
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Do
characters use verbal tricks and traps to get what they want, not just direct
confrontation?
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Alice and Dicky offer a new bout to pre-empt the
conversation. Dicky claims he
can get money.
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Is
there re-blocking, including literal push and pull between the scene partners
(often resulting in just one touch)?
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Oddly, there is no re-blocking after Alice and Dicky
sit down. Presumably it just
would have been too hard to choreograph an 11-character scene in a small
space. There is one touch, when
Dicky puts a hand on Micky’s knee to pull him back in.
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Are
objects given or taken, representing larger values?
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Not really.
Alice has a business binder, but doesn’t offer a paper of the new deal
to Micky, as we would expect. She smokes a cigarette, and smoke wafts onto
everyone. Neither really counts
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The
Outcome: Does this scene change the story going forward?
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As a
result of this scene, does at least one of the scene partners end up doing
something that he or she didn’t intend to do when the scene began?
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Sort of. It mostly ends in a draw. Micky agrees to give Dicky a chance
to get the money.
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Does
the outcome of the scene ironically reverse (and/or ironically fulfill) the
original intention?
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Yes, Micky and Charlene came to confront the family,
but they get sucked in.
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Are
previously-asked questions answered and new questions posed?
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Previous: What will happen when Charlene meets
them? What will the next fight
be? New: How will Dicky get the
money?
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Does
the scene cut out early, on a question (possibly to be answered instantly by
the circumstances of the next scene)?
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Dicky says he’ll get the money, Micky responds,
“You? How?”
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Is the
audience left with a growing hope and/or fear for what might happen next?
(Not just in the next scene, but generally)
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Yes, we hate that he’s being sucked back in.
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PART
#5: DIALOGUE 16/16
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Empathetic:
Is the dialogue true to human nature?
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Does
the writing demonstrate empathy for all of the characters?
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Yes.
Not as much for the sisters, but they’re still pretty lovable.
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Does
each of the characters, including the hero, have a limited perspective?
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Very much so.
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Do the
characters consciously and unconsciously prioritize their own wants, rather
than the wants of others?
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Well, Mickey’s whole problem is that he fails to do
this, but he learns the value of prioritizing his own wants, so that counts.
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Are
the characters resistant to openly admitting their feelings (to others and
even to themselves)?
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Well, everybody’s pretty brash except Mickey, but
everybody has hard confessions dragged out of them in the end.
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Do the
characters avoid saying things they wouldn’t say and doing things they
wouldn’t do?
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Again, there’s little they won’t say, but yes,
they’re all nicely passive aggressive about Micky being courted by other
managers, for instance.
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Do the
characters interrupt each other often?
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Very much so.
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Specific: Is the dialogue specific to this world
and each personality?
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Does
the dialogue capture the jargon and tradecraft of the profession and/or
setting?
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Tons of Lowell-ese. Boxing tradecraft: “Stepping-stone” “Head-body-head”
etc.
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Are
there additional characters with distinct metaphor families, default
personality traits, and default argument strategies from the hero’s?
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Metaphor family: Alice: Lowell, Dicky: boxing,
Charlene: bar, Default personality trait: Alice: vain, manipulative.
Dicky: gregarious, hyper, sketchy. Charlene: blunt, sexual, honest. , Argument
strategy: Alice:
Guilt trip, false promises. Dicky: lies, appeal to old times. Charlene: hits
you where it hurts.
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Heightened:
Is the dialogue more pointed and dynamic than real talk?
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Is the
dialogue more concise than real talk?
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Yes.
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Does
the dialogue have more personality than real talk?
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Very much so.
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Are
there minimal commas in the dialogue (the lines are not prefaced with Yes,
No, Well, Look, or the other character’s name)?
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Yes.
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Do
non-professor characters speak without dependent clauses, conditionals, or
parallel construction?
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Yes.
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Are
the non-3-dimensional characters impartially polarized into head, heart and
gut?
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Despite the fact that the personalities are extreme,
everyone is 3-dimensional. You
could say that Dicky and Micky are 2-way polarized: silent vs. prattling,
slow-burn vs. flame-out, etc.
Dicky’s constant advice to Micky: “Head-Body-Head-Body!”, speaks to
the fact that a champion must be both a boxer (head) and a brawler (gut.)
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Strategic: Are certain dialogue scenes withheld
until necessary?
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Does
the hero have at least one big “I understand you” moment with a love interest
or primary emotional partner?
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Very
much so, after the first date.
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Is
exposition withheld until the hero and the audience are both demanding to
know it?
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Yes, it’s expertly parceled out, particularly our
growing awareness of the magnitude of Dicky’s (and therefore Micky’s)
problem.
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Is
there one gutpunch scene, where the subtext falls away and the characters
really lay into each other?
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Yes, a few.
When Charlene says she won’t let Dicky back in Micky’s corner unless
he says that Sugar Ray tripped, that’s a hell of a gutpunch. Also when Micky says “I thought you
were my mother too.”
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PART
#6: TONE 9/10
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Genre:
Does the story tap into pre-established expectations?
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Is the
story limited to one genre (or multiple genres that are merged from the
beginning?)
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It combines four: Sports, biopic, drama, merged
throughout
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Is the
story limited to sub-genres that are compatible with each other, without
mixing metaphors?
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Yes. Boxing, addiction, romance, family drama
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Does
the ending satisfy most of the expectations of the genre, and defy a few
others?
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It satisfies just about all.
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Separate
from the genre, is a consistent mood (goofy, grim, ‘fairy tale’, etc.)
established early and maintained throughout?
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Yes, it’s surprisingly upbeat and funny throughout,
no matter how grim it gets, which is one of Russell’s gifts.
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Framing:
Does the story set, reset, upset and ultimately exceed its own expectations?
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Is
there a dramatic question posed early on, which will establish in the
audience’s mind which moment will mark the end of the story?
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He says he’s going to be a champion.
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Does the story use framing devices to establish
genre, mood and expectations?
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Interviews with
Micky and Dicky.
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Are
there characters whose situations prefigure various fates that might await
the hero?
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Dicky is a cautionary tale for Micky.
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Does
foreshadowing create anticipation and suspense (and refocus the audience’s
attention on what’s important)?
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Not really.
Russell is a very direct sort of filmmaker. Everything feels very raw and real, and that describes the
characters as well. He likes to
disappear as a director, and not grant himself foreknowledge of their
actions. There’s never any ominous camerawork or music.
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Are
reversible behaviors used to foreshadow and then confirm change?
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Dicky goes to the
crackhouse one last time, etc.
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Is the
dramatic question answered at the very end of the story?
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Micky becomes champion.
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PART
7: THEME 13/14
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Difficult:
Is the meaning of the story derived from a fundamental moral dilemma?
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Can
the overall theme be stated in the form of an irreconcilable good vs. good
(or evil vs. evil) dilemma?
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Family vs. independence.
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Is a
thematic question asked out loud (or clearly implied) in the first half, and
left open?
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Implied: is he a boxer or a brawler or can be be
both?
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Do the
characters consistently have to choose between goods, or between evils,
instead of choosing between good and evil?
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Should you protect your criminal brother from a
police beating? Etc.
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Grounded:
Do the stakes ring true to the world of the audience?
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Does
the story reflect the way the world works?
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Very much so.
It’s a true story.
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Does
the story have something authentic to say about this type of setting (Is it
based more on observations of this type of setting than ideas about it)?
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Very much so. They shot in Lowell, and some people
played themselves.
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Does
the story include twinges of real life national pain?
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Very much so.
Lots about crack, etc.
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Are
these issues and the overall dilemma addressed in a way that avoids moral
hypocrisy?
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Yes.
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Do all
of the actions have real consequences?
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Yes.
Dicky goes to jail. Both
brothers have kids they rarely see.
The broken hand keeps Micky out of the ring for a long time.
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Subtle: Is the theme interwoven throughout so
that it need not be discussed often?
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Do
many small details throughout subtly and/or ironically tie into the thematic
dilemma?
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All of the talk about fighting styles parallels
what’s going on out of the ring: “He takes a lot of punishment, I don’t know
why he does it, he stays on the inside, I fight on the outside.” Etc.
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Are
one or more objects representing larger ideas exchanged throughout the story,
growing in meaning each time?
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Charlene’s number on a bar napkin. The “pride of Lowell” cake.
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Untidy:
Is the dilemma ultimately irresolvable?
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Does
the ending tip towards one side of the thematic dilemma without resolving it
entirely?
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Family
and independence must be kept in balance.
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Does
the story’s outcome ironically contrast with the initial goal?
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Very much so.
What starts out as a story about breaking free of your rotten family
becomes a story about taking strength from your rotten family.
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In the
end, is the plot not entirely tidy (some small plot threads left unresolved,
some answers left vague)?
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Very much so. The events are very messy.
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Do the
characters refuse (or fail) to synthesize the meaning of the story, forcing
the audience to do that?
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No, the epilogue hits it pretty squarely on the head, but
that’s fine. It’s a sports movie.
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