Farmboy Luke
Skywalker gets a chance to leave his backwater planet and join the rebellion
when two droids, Artoo and Threepio, crash on his planet, leading him to
magical hermit Obi Wan, cocky smuggler Han Solo, hirsute co-pilot Chewbacca,
and kick-ass Princess Leia. Together they take on Darth Vader and his Death
Star.
Final Score: 113 out of 122
PART
#1: CONCEPT 19/19
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The Pitch: Does this concept excite everyone who
hears about it?
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Is the
one sentence description uniquely appealing?
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A farmboy on a distant planet
becomes the hero of a galactic rebellion.
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Does
the concept contain an intriguing ironic contradiction?
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The kid who didn’t get to go
join the rebellion becomes the hero of the rebellion.
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Is this a story anyone can identify with, projected onto
a bigger canvas, with higher stakes?
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Very much so.
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Story Fundamentals: Will this concept generate a
strong story?
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Is the
concept simple enough to spend more time on character than plot?
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Yes and no. There’s a lot of plot, so much so
that we need an exposition pre-roll, but compared to the prequels, it’s
fairly straightforward.
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Is
there one character that the audience will choose to be their “hero”?
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Luke, though we find Han more
appealing.
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Does
the story follow the progress of the hero’s problem, not the hero’s daily
life?
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Yes.
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Does
the story present a unique relationship?
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(Unless you’ve seen Hidden Fortress) The farmboy, the
mercenary, the princess, the hermit and the princess.
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Is at
least one actual human being opposed to what the hero is doing?
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Darth Vader
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Does
this challenge represent the hero’s greatest hope and/or greatest fear and/or
an ironic answer to the hero’s question?
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Greatest
hope: he finally gets his chance to go be a pilot.
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Does
something inside the hero have a particularly volatile reaction to the
challenge?
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It begins
his spiritual awakening. We sense that Han could never power a lightsaber,
for instance.
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Does
this challenge become something that is the not just hard for the hero to do (an obstacle) but hard for the hero
to want to do (a conflict)?
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It is at
first, because of his aunt and uncle.
It’s pretty easy to want to do after they’re killed.
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In the
end, is the hero the only one who can solve the problem?
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Only he can make the shot because only
he has the force.
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Does
the hero permanently transform the situation and vice versa?
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Transform
situation: He blows up the death star, transform hero: he’s a hero now and
gets a medal to prove it.
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The
Hook: Will this be marketable and generate word of mouth?
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Does
the story satisfy the basic human urges that get people to buy and recommend
this genre?
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Lots of
swashbuckling fun and otherworldly imagery
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Does
this story show us at least one image we haven’t seen before (that can be
used to promote the final product)?
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That opening
spaceship! Darth Vader. The two moons. The light saber, the Death Star,
etc.
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Is
there at least one “Holy Crap!” scene (to create word of mouth)?
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See above.
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Does
the story contain a surprise that is not obvious from the beginning?
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Somewhat:
Obi Wan is killed.
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Is the
story marketable without revealing the surprise?
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Yes.
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Is the
conflict compelling and ironic both before and after the surprise?
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Yes.
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PART
#2: CHARACTER 21/22
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Believe:
Do we recognize the hero as a human being?
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Does
the hero have a moment of humanity early on? (A funny, or kind, or oddball,
or out-of-character, or comically vain, or unique-but-universal “I thought I
was the only one who did that!” moment?)
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This is tricky,
because the hero’s introductory scene was cut. Why is Luke so likeable? He’s petulant and whiny, not kind, not
very funny. We like his wisecracking, his curiosity, his dreamer quality, and
his very universal quality of frustration at living in a remote rural area.
As with Downhill Racer, we come to
like him the most when he looks off into the distance at sunset.
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Is the
hero defined by ongoing actions and attitudes, not by backstory?
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Yes.
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Does
the hero have a well-defined public identity?
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The unhappy
farmboy
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Does
the surface characterization ironically contrast with a hidden interior self?
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The would-be
galactic adventurer
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Does
the hero have a consistent metaphor family (drawn from his or her job,
background, or developmental state)?
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Only
vaguely: Farmboy/Schoolboy “Boy am I gonna get it!” “C’mon, let’s go have a
look!” For the most part, he is a pure everyman. We strongly identify with
him but we don’t really admire anything about him.
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Does
the hero have a default personality trait?
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Petulant, whiny,
wisecracking
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Does
the hero have a default argument tactic?
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Ineffective
disputation
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Is the
hero’s primary motivation for tackling this challenge strong, simple, and
revealed early on?
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Solve R2’s
problem before it gets him in trouble.
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Care:
Do we feel for the hero?
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Does
the hero start out with a shortsighted or wrongheaded philosophy (or accept a
false piece of advice early on)?
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“It looks like I’m going nowhere.” “I
see, Sir Luke” [chuckles] “No, just Luke” (aka, “I can’t be a knight”) Later,
he says, “I can’t get involved. I’ve got work to do. It’s not that I like the
empire, I hate it, but there’s nothing I can do about it right now. It’s such
a long way from here.”
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Does
the hero have a false or shortsighted goal in the first half?
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Fix R2, get
him back, take Obi Wan only as far as Anchorhead, etc.
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Does
the hero have an open fear or anxiety about his or her future, as well as a
hidden, private fear?
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Open: That
he’ll never get to be a pilot.
Hidden: That he’ll be corrupted.
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Is the
hero physically and emotionally vulnerable?
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Yes.
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Does
the hero have at least one untenable great flaw we empathize with? (but…)
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Naïve and
whiny.
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Invest:
Can we trust the hero to tackle this challenge?
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…Is that great flaw (ironically) the natural
flip-side of a great strength we admire?
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Idealistic
and eager.
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Is the
hero curious?
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Very much
so: wants to hear more about the rebellion, more about his father, see the
whole video, etc.
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Is the
hero generally resourceful?
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He comes up
with clever plans throughout.
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Does
the hero have rules he or she lives by (either stated or implied)?
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I deserve
better, I know what I’m doing, It can’t be that hard.
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Is the
hero surrounded by people who sorely lack his or her most valuable quality?
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Only he is
pure enough to tap into the force and self-taught enough to make the shot.
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…And
is the hero willing to let them know that, subtly or directly?
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He doesn’t
boast about the force, but he certainly boasts about his home-grown shooting
abilities.
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Is the
hero already doing something active when we first meet him or her?
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He’s always
angling to get off the planet.
Even getting and fixing the droids is part of his plan to replace
himself so he leave.
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Does
the hero have (or claim) decision-making authority?
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He ignores
his guardians (even before they’re killed off.)
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Does
the hero use pre-established special skills from his or her past to solve
problems (rather than doing what anybody would do)?
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Mainly just
second hand (he boasts and others compliment him “I understand you’ve become
quite a good pilot yourself.”), but we see his innate talent for the force
when he practices his lightsaber.
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PART
#3: STRUCTURE (If the story is about the solving of a large problem) 20/21
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1st
Quarter: Is the challenge laid out in the first quarter?
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When
the story begins, is the hero becoming increasingly irritated about his or
her longstanding social problem (while still in denial about an internal
flaw)?
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He wants to
go off to flight school and feels left out, but he’s not dealing with the
moral complexities.
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Does
this problem become undeniable due to a social humiliation at the beginning
of the story?
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He’s told he
has to stay on another season. “You can waste time with your friends when
your chores are done.” And later, “It looks like I’m going nowhere.” R2D2
tricks him into removing the restraining bolt, then runs away.
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Does
the hero discover an intimidating opportunity to fix the problem?
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His new
robot has a message for the rebellion, and leads him to a friend of his
father who proposes a “damn fool crusade”
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Does
the hero hesitate until the stakes are raised?
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Only commits
to taking Obi Wan to Anchorhead
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Does the hero commit to pursuing the opportunity by the
end of the first quarter?
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He commits
late, at 38 minutes in: “I want to come with you to Alderan, there’s nothing
here for me now. I want to learn the ways of the Force and become a Jedi like
my father.”
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2nd
Quarter: Does the hero try the easy way in the second quarter?
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Does
the hero’s pursuit of the opportunity quickly lead to an unforeseen conflict
with another person?
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Mos Eisley
turns out to be a hive of scum and villainy. Their pilot turns out to have a
price on his head.
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Does
the hero try the easy way throughout the second quarter?
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Hires it
done, lies to Han about cargo.
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Does
the hero have a little fun and get excited about the possibility of success?
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Fun
lightspeed effect, actual fun and games with chess game, lightsaber practice.
They all think they’re about to arrive in Alderaan and have it made.
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Does the
easy way lead to a big crash around the midpoint, resulting in the loss of a
safe space and/or sheltering relationship?
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In this
case, bigger disasters happen at the ¼ and ¾ points, (the deaths of Luke’s
parent-figures and mentor) but there is a midpoint disaster, as they realize
that the planet that they’re heading towards has been destroyed, and their
ship is seized.
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3rd
Quarter: Does the hero try the hard way in the third quarter?
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Does
the hero try the hard way from this point on?
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Infiltrates
the Death Star
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Does
the hero find out who his or her real friends and real enemies are?
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Not in this one.
Good and bad are readily evident.
Betrayals and redemptions will come in later movies.
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Do the
stakes, pace, and motivation all escalate at this point?
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It becomes
very thrilling, cross-cutting between four groups in danger.
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Does
the hero learn from mistakes in a painful way?
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Sees Obi Wan
die
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Does a
further setback lead to a spiritual crisis?
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This causes
him to doubt the force, fall back on his reliance on technology and his
original dream of becoming a fighter pilot.
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4th
Quarter: Does the challenge climax in the fourth quarter?
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Does
the hero adopt a corrected philosophy after the spiritual crisis?
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Not until
the end: “Use the force”
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After
that crisis, does the hero finally commit to pursuing a corrected goal, which
still seems far away?
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Finally
discovers true goal: use the plans to blow up the Death Star.
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Before
the final quarter of the story begins, (if not long before) has your hero switched
to being proactive, instead of reactive?
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Yes, they
plan to attack the Death Star…
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Despite
these proactive steps, is the timeline unexpectedly moved up, forcing the
hero to improvise for the finale?
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…but the
Death Star attacks them first.
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Do all
strands of the story and most of the characters come together for the
climactic confrontation?
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Yes. Not in
the same place, but all part of the same confrontation. Everyone but Threepio takes part
(even Artoo is in the X-Wing.)
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Does
the hero’s inner struggle climax shortly after (or possible at the same time
as) his or her outer struggle?
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He resolves
his inner struggle at the final moment in order to succeed.
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Is
there an epilogue/ aftermath/ denouement in which the challenge is finally
resolved (or succumbed to), and we see how much the hero has changed
(possibly through reversible behavior)
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He’s now a
celebrated hero.
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PART
#4: SCENEWORK (The gang
takes over the Death Star command office) 16/20
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The
Set-Up: Does this scene begin with the essential elements it needs?
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Were
tense and/or hopeful (and usually false) expectations for this interaction
established beforehand?
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No, they’re flying
by the seat of their pants, and they don’t know what they’re going to find.
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Does
the scene eliminate small talk and repeated beats by cutting out the
beginning (or possibly even the middle)?
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We don’t see
them make the plan, we just begin with the culmination of it.
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Is
this an intimidating setting that keeps characters active?
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They’re
surrounded with people trying to kill them.
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Is one
of the scene partners not planning to have this conversation (and quite
possibly has something better to do)?
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No, they’re all in
mid-conversation already.
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Is
there at least one non-plot element complicating the scene?
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Not really
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Does
the scene establish its own mini-ticking-clock (if only through subconscious
anticipation)?
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We know that
Darth Vader can sense Obi-Wan, and that Leia’s death order has been given.
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The
Conflict: Do the conflicts play out in a lively manner?
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Does this scene both advance the plot and reveal
character through emotional reactions?
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More plot
than character, but character is revealed in Han’s decision, and Obi Wan’s farewell.
Luke, Han and Chewie all take offense at things.
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Does
the audience have (or develop) a rooting interest in this scene (which may
sometimes shift)?
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In the first
debate, we’re not sure if Luke should go with Obi-Wan. In the second, we’ve
come to love Leia, so we side with Luke when he tries to convince Han to
rescue her.
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Are
two agendas genuinely clashing (rather than merely two personalities)?
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First
Obi-Wan wants Luke to stay and Luke wants to come, then Luke wants to go and
Han wants to stay.
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Does
the scene have both a surface conflict and a suppressed conflict (one of
which is the primary conflict in this scene)?
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Obi-Wan and
Luke are also arguing about Luke’s destiny, Luke and Han are also arguing
about Han’s flaw.
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Is the
suppressed conflict (which may or may not come to the surface) implied
through subtext (and/or called out by the other character)?
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Not really.
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Are
the characters cagy (or in denial) about their own feelings?
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Luke sells
Han by mentioning the princess’s money, not her beauty, because he’s fallen
in love with her himself.
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Do
characters use verbal tricks and traps to get what they want, not just direct
confrontation?
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Luke tempts
Han into it by playing on his greed.
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Is
there re-blocking, including literal push and pull between the scene partners
(often resulting in just one touch)?
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Obi-Wan
touches Luke’s arm once to convince him.
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Are
objects given or taken, representing larger values?
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Artoo
physically access the plans, Han tries to put cuffs on Chewy, then hands them
to Han, who puts them on Chewy, Luke hands Han a helmet to signal it’s time
to go.
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The
Outcome: Does this scene change the story going forward?
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As a
result of this scene, does at least one of the scene partners end up doing
something that he or she didn’t intend to do when the scene began?
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Luke is
convinced to stay, then he convinces Han to leave with him.
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Does the
outcome of the scene ironically reverse (and/or ironically fulfill) the
original intention?
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They find a
secure place to hide, then they decide to leave.
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Are
previously-asked questions answered and new questions posed?
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The previous
scene left us asking, “What’s their plan?” The scene intro answers that. New:
Will the room be breached? Will
the new plan work? Will Obi-Wan’s plan succeed?
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Does
the scene cut out early, on a question (possibly to be answered instantly by
the circumstances of the next scene)?
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“What should Artoo and I do if we’re
discovered here?” The only answer they get is sarcastic.
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Is the
audience left with a growing hope and/or fear for what might happen next?
(Not just in the next scene, but generally)
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We’re very worried, especially after
Obi-Wan’s pointed farewell.
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PART
#5: DIALOGUE 15/16
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Empathetic:
Is the dialogue true to human nature?
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Does
the writing demonstrate empathy for all of the characters?
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Even Darth
Vader deals with disrespect in this movie, in the interrogations, we
understand the stakes and worries on both sides, Uncle Owen and Aunt Beru
both have strong and independent points to make, etc.
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Does
each of the characters, including the hero, have a limited perspective?
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One could
argue that Obi Wan has an unlimited perspective, but he is wisely killed off,
leaving lots of people who are unsure of themselves.
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Do the
characters consciously and unconsciously prioritize their own wants, rather
than the wants of others?
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Luke and Han
are both just trying to solve short-term problems until near the end.
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Are
the characters resistant to openly admitting their feelings (to others and
even to themselves)?
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The crushes
remain sublimated in this movie.
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Do the
characters avoid saying things they wouldn’t say and doing things they
wouldn’t do?
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Han hides
his true situation from them, and vice versa.
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Do the
characters interrupt each other often?
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Owen and
Luke talk past each other, nobody listens to Threepio, etc.
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Specific: Is the dialogue specific to this world
and each personality?
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Does
the dialogue capture the jargon and tradecraft of the profession and/or
setting?
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Lots of good
made-up jargon. Good smuggling tradecraft. Believable structure of the
rebellion (hiding behind the cover of a phony diplomatic mission, etc.)
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Are
there additional characters with distinct metaphor families, default
personality traits, and default argument strategies from the hero’s?
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Metaphor family: Han: Pirate / Hawksian tough-guy “She’s fast enough for you, old
man” “It’s going to cost you something extra”, Leia: Veneer of diplomacy,
revealing royal-born contempt “I should have expected to find you
holding Vader's leash. I recognized your foul stench when I was brought on
board”, Obi Wan: Jolly old elf on the surface
“since, oh, before you were born”, revealing General (“Quickly, son, they’re
on the move.” “Sand People always ride single file to hide there
numbers.) (Even when discussing the force, he can
sound like a general: “This is the weapon of a Jedi Knight. Not as clumsy or as
random as a blaster.”), Threepio: British pessimist (the
accent is twit, but the language is lower-class) “we’ll be smashed into who
knows what!” “It’s our lot in life” “And don't let me catch you
following me begging for help, because you won't get it.”, Default personality trait: Han:
Cocky, selfish, smug, Leia: brave, spunky, smug, Obi Wan: wise, tough,
Threepio: worrywart , Argument strategy: Han: wisecracks, ridicule, shoots first, Leia: superior
knowledge and cynicism, Obi Wan: Either does his Jedi mind trick or says
something wise then goes silent and leaves it up to you, Threepio: Constant
hectoring, cites odds, lists everything that could go wrong.
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Heightened:
Is the dialogue more pointed and dynamic than real talk?
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Is the
dialogue more concise than real talk?
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Yes.
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Does
the dialogue have more personality than real talk?
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Very much
so. “You will never find a more wretched hive of scum and villainy.”
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Are
there minimal commas in the dialogue (the lines are not prefaced with Yes,
No, Well, Look, or the other character’s name)?
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Yes.
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Do
non-professor characters speak without dependent clauses, conditionals, or
parallel construction?
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Yes.
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Are
the non-3-dimensional characters impartially polarized into head, heart and
gut?
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Four way
polarization: Luke: heart, Leia (and Threepio): head, Han: gut, Obi Wan:
spirit.
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Strategic: Are certain dialogue scenes withheld
until necessary?
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Does
the hero have at least one big “I understand you” moment with a love interest
or primary emotional partner?
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No, which is
why the sequel writers decided not to get them together after all.
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Is
exposition withheld until the hero and the audience are both demanding to
know it?
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We start out
with a massive onscreen info dump, but the exposition is parceled out deftly
from that point on. Breaking up the video playback into two sections is a
nice trick.
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Is
there one gutpunch scene, where the subtext falls away and the characters
really lay into each other?
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Somewhat,
when Luke and Leia confront Han.
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PART
#6: TONE 9/10
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Genre:
Does the story tap into pre-established expectations?
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Is the
story limited to one genre (or multiple genres that are merged from the
beginning?)
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Combines
sci-fi and fantasy throughout
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Is the
story limited to sub-genres that are compatible with each other, without mixing
metaphors?
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Space opera,
sword and sorcery.
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Does
the ending satisfy most of the expectations of the genre, and defy a few
others?
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The hero,
the rogue and the mentor are all fairly traditional, but the princess is
kick-ass, which defied expectations at the time.
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Separate
from the genre, is a consistent mood (goofy, grim, ‘fairy tale’, etc.)
established early and maintained throughout?
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The fairy
tale element is consistent throughout. C3PO calls him “Sir Luke”
accidentally. The side-wipes
give it a ‘turning the pages of a fairy tale” feel. “That wizard’s just a crazy old man.
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Framing:
Does the story set, reset, upset and ultimately exceed its own expectations?
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Is
there a dramatic question posed early on, which will establish in the
audience’s mind which moment will mark the end of the story?
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What are the
plans, why does the empire want them, and who will end up them?
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Does the story use framing devices to establish
genre, mood and expectations?
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Opening
title, followed by scroll.
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Are
there characters whose situations prefigure various fates that might await
the hero?
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Not really. Again, these were cut
(contrasting Luke with his friends who didn’t leave and his friend who did
leave.) Han isn’t really a parallel character because he and Luke haven’t
faced the same choices.
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Does
foreshadowing create anticipation and suspense (and refocus the audience’s
attention on what’s important)?
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“He has too much of his father in
him.” “That’s what I’m afraid of.”
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Are
reversible behaviors used to foreshadow and then confirm change?
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Han acts
selfishly until he doesn’t, Luke trusts technology until he doesn’t. Even Threepio offers his circuits to
repair Artoo in the last spoken line.
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Is the
dramatic question answered at the very end of the story?
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The plans
are used to destroy the Death Star at the very end.
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PART
7: THEME 13/14
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Difficult:
Is the meaning of the story derived from a fundamental moral dilemma?
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Can
the overall theme be stated in the form of an irreconcilable good vs. good
(or evil vs. evil) dilemma?
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Spirituality
vs. technology, freedom vs. unjust peace, solidarity vs. personal safety
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Is a
thematic question asked out loud (or clearly implied) in the first half, and
left open?
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The first is implied when Uncle Owen says Luke
should work on the robots instead of seeking out a “crazy old wizard”. Also
this: “You mean it controls your actions?” “Partially, but it also obeys your
commands.” Also: Hokey religions and ancient weapons are no match for a
good blaster at your side, kid.” The second
dilemma formed the heart of Luke’s discussion of Biggs, which was cut, but
it’s implied by this exchange: “It's not that I like the Empire. I
hate it! But there's nothing I can do about it right now. It's such a long
way from here.”
The third is prefigured by Han’s discussion with Greedo.
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Do the
characters consistently have to choose between goods, or between evils,
instead of choosing between good and evil?
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Endanger
relatives to help the cause of freedom? Risk the mission to save the
princess?
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Grounded:
Do the stakes ring true to the world of the audience?
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Does
the story reflect the way the world works?
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The farmers
don’t care about the revolution. The empire has a toothless Senate to give it
a fig-leaf of democracy.
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Does
the story have something authentic to say about this type of setting (Is it
based more on observations of this type of setting than ideas about it)?
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The farming
community couldn’t be more bizarre, but it’s recognizable.
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Does
the story include twinges of real life national pain?
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The whole
thing mirrors Vietnam very closely.
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Are
these issues and the overall dilemma addressed in a way that avoids moral
hypocrisy?
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The empire
resembles America (and the good guys the Viet Cong) and gives us a pretty
unpleasant picture of ourselves.
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Do all
of the actions have real consequences?
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Helping the
rebels gets his aunt and uncle killed.
Rescuing the princess gets Obi Wan killed.
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Subtle: Is the theme interwoven throughout so
that it need not be discussed often?
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Do
many small details throughout subtly and/or ironically tie into the thematic
dilemma?
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Somewhat. Part of
the appeal of the movie is that it’s filled with such utterly strange and
seemingly random details that don’t really “made a point” but just made this
feel like an endlessly strange and fascinating world, so it’s a plus that the
details don’t all back up the theme.
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Are
one or more objects representing larger ideas exchanged throughout the story,
growing in meaning each time?
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Somewhat.
The plans of the Death Star, the lightsabers.
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Untidy:
Is the dilemma ultimately irresolvable?
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Does
the ending tip towards one side of the thematic dilemma without resolving it
entirely?
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Spirituality
is better than technology, but even more dangerous in the wrong hands.
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Does
the story’s outcome ironically contrast with the initial goal?
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He defeats
the bad guys using the technology he learned at home, not by acting like the
other pilots.
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In the
end, is the plot not entirely tidy (some small plot threads left unresolved,
some answers left vague)?
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Vader lives,
the empire continues, and Jabba’s debt is still looming over Han.
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Do the
characters refuse (or fail) to synthesize the meaning of the story, forcing
the audience to do that?
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The finale
is wordless.
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Even if STAR WARS does become your checklist's statistical poster boy, your gift to the world of storytelling will be in liberating the reasons for admiring/emulating it from the Procrustean bed of the Hero's Journey.
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