Part 1: Is
  this a strong concept for an ongoing series? (18/20)          
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The Pitch: Does this concept excite
  everyone who hears about it? 
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Does the concept
  satisfy the urges that get people to love and recommend this type of series? 
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 Murders in the first episode 
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Does the series establish its own unique point of view on its setting?  
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  Flashforwards with inexplicable imagery will be common. 
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Is there a central relationship we haven’t seen in a series before? 
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  Very much so. 
  A Chemistry teacher and his flunked-out student cook meth together. 
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Does the ongoing concept of the series contain a fundamental (and
  possibly fun) ironic contradiction? 
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  Very much so. 
  A meek high-school teacher cooks meth. 
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Does the concept meet the content expectations of one particular intended
  network, venue, or audience?  
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  Yes
  and no.  It was created for FX,
  as a follow-up to “The Shield” (drugs, crime, edgy black humor, angry white
  male with disabled kid), and it mostly met their expectations but not quite
  (hero too lame), so they bumped it to AMC, where it was the follow-up to “Mad
  Men”, which was an even weirder fit, but it wound up fitting just fine
  (anti-hero with extreme disconnect between work and domestic life, etc.)  
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Even if the setting is unpleasant, is there something about this premise
  that is inherently appealing? (Something that will make the audience say,
  “Yes, I will be able to root for some
  aspect of this situation to recur episode after episode.”) 
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  “I am awake”. 
  He stands up to his son’s bullies and renews his sex life. 
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Series Fundamentals: Will this concept
  generate a strong ongoing series? 
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Is there one character (or sometimes two, in separate storylines) that
  the audience will choose to be their primary hero (although these heroes
  should probably be surrounded by an ensemble that can more than hold their
  own)? 
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 Walt. 
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If this is a TV series, is the hero role strong enough to get an actor to
  abandon a movie career, come to work in TV for the first time, and sign a
  five-year contract before shooting the pilot? (And even if not for TV, is the
  hero role still that strong, simply for narrative purposes?) 
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 Possibly, but they didn’t try. Instead, they took
  the incredibly risk step of hiring a seemingly unimpressive sitcom vet.  
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 It has various settings, but the RV is
  clearly unsafe, for many reasons. 
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Is this a setting that will bring (or has brought) different economic
  classes together? 
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 Very much so.  
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Will trouble walk in the door on a regular basis? 
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 Literally, in the pilot, and frequently thereafter. 
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Will the heroes be forced to engage in both physical and cerebral
  activity on a regular basis? 
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 That’s a good description of chemistry. 
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Are there big stakes that will persist episode after episode? 
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 Huge: economic threats, health threats,
  crime threats, moral threats, etc. 
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Will the ongoing situation produce goals or mini-goals that can be
  satisfactorily resolved on a regular basis? 
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 Individual drug deals. 
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The Pilot: Will this pilot episode be
  marketable and generate word of mouth? 
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Does the pilot contain all of the entertainment value inherent in the
  premise (rather than just setting everything up and promising that the fun
  will start next week)? 
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 Yes, the outlandish premise is
  established by the midpoint, and then we go all the way to Walt’s first deal
  and first murders. 
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Does the pilot feature an image we haven’t seen before (that can be used
  to promote the show)? 
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 The man in his tighty-whiteys holding a
  gun. The flying pants, etc. 
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Is there something bold, weird, and never-before-seen about this concept
  and/or pilot?   
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 Very much so.  The already weird idea become even more bizarrely
  nightmarish in the flashforward. 
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Is there a “HOLY CRAP!” scene somewhere along the way in the pilot (to
  create word of mouth)? 
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 The killings, Walt almost killing
  himself, etc. 
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Does the pilot build up potential energy that will power future episodes
  (secrets that will come out, potential romances, etc.)? 
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 Very much so: When will each of them find
  out about Walt’s cancer?  When
  will each of them find out about Walt’s drug dealing (especially Hank)? 
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Even if this is episodic, is there a major twist or escalation at the end
  (though sometimes this twist will only be new to, or only revealed to, the
  audience) that will kick future episodes up a notch? 
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 Yes, Walt has now killed. 
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Part 2: Is this a compelling
  hero? (Note: some shows have two almost-co-equal heroes, who will tend to
  star in separate storylines in each episode, in which case each of these
  questions should be answered twice.) (16/16) 
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Believe: Do we recognize the hero (or
  co-heroes) as human? 
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Does the hero have a moment of humanity early on? (A funny, or kind, or
  oddball, or out-of-character, or comically vain, or unique-but-universal “I
  thought I was the only one who did that!” moment?) 
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 Out of character: a meek teacher points a
  gun at the approaching cops.   
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Does the hero have a well-defined public identity? 
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 Good teacher, wimpy husband. 
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Does that ironically contrast with a hidden interior self? 
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 Angry and potentially violent. 
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Does the hero have three rules he or she lives by (either stated or
  implied)? 
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 I deserve better, I’m smarter than them,
  my family must be taken care of. 
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Does the hero have a consistent metaphor family (drawn from his or her
  job, background, or developmental state)? 
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 He references chemistry a fair amount,
  but surprisingly he doesn't use it for a lot of metaphors.  Instead, he uses a lot of
  ill-informed movie-tough-guy dialogue “We only sell it, we don’t use it.”   
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Does the hero have a default personality trait? 
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 Meekness with simmering anger just below
  the surface. 
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Does the hero have a default argument tactic? 
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  Faux-naivite, “You think I might see inside?” 
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Care: Do we feel for the hero (or
  co-heroes) 
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Does the hero have a
  great flaw that is the flip side of his great strength? 
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  One
  strength/flaw pairing is science brilliance / contempt for others’
  intelligence.  Another is
  devotion to family / willingness to kill others to help them.  
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Does the hero feel that this flaw cannot be resolved until it’s time to
  abandon the world of the show? 
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 Not yet, but he’ll come to believe that
  he must cook meth indefinitely to maintain his self-respect and his family’s
  economic security.  We never
  accept this, however, so this is one show where the audience actively wants
  to show to end.  In the end, the
  pushed the episode count just as far as the audience could tolerate, but no
  further. 
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Does the flaw resonate with the theme and/or setting of the show? 
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 The flaw is the theme here, and the
  modern-day-wild-west setting speaks to the themes of
  masculinity-vs.-civilization.   
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Invest: Can we trust the hero (or
  co-heroes) to tackle this challenge? 
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Does the hero have a
  great strength that is the flip side of his great flaw? 
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 See above. 
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Is the hero good at
  his or her job (or family role, if that’s his or her primary role)? 
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 Both, very much so. 
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Is the hero surrounded by people who sorely lack his or her most valuable
  quality? 
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 No one else has his brilliance and
  they’re all very insensitive to his problems. 
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Is the hero curious? 
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 Very much so. 
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Is the hero generally resourceful? 
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 Very much so. 
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Does the hero use unique skills to solve problems (rather than doing what
  anybody else on the show would do)? 
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 He gets the lab equipment from his
  school, uses his chemistry knowledge to get into and out of trouble, finds
  Jesse through the school database, etc.  
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Part 3: Is
  this a strong ensemble (beyond the hero or co-heroes)?  (7/13) 
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Powerful: Is
  each member of the ensemble able to hold his or her own? 
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If this is a network TV series, are there at least two more roles that
  are strong enough to get TV veterans to sign their own five-year contracts?
  (And even if not for TV, are the characters still that strong, simply for
  narrative purposes?) 
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 No. The rest of the cast were total unknowns,
  partially because only Walt seems like a really strong character in the
  pilot.  They got very lucky to
  find unknown actors who were able to rise to the task as these characters
  become stronger and more complex.  
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Are all of the other regular roles strong enough on the page in this
  first episode to attract great actors? (ditto) 
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 No, but Vince Gilligan knew that these characters
  would soon become stronger, so he was able to convince great unknown actors
  to commit. 
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Does each member of
  the ensemble have a distinct and defensible point of view? 
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 Yes and no.  The
  others all somewhat cartoonishly asshole-ish in the pilot, but it’s not hard
  to imagine that they will provide legitimate pushback soon enough, and indeed
  they do.   
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Is each character defined primarily by actions and attitudes, not by his
  or her backstory? 
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 Yes.  Even Walt Jr. is defined not by his CP but by is cheeky
  attitude. 
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Do all of the
  characters consciously and unconsciously prioritize their own wants, rather
  than the wants of others? (Good characters don’t serve good, evil characters
  don’t serve evil.) 
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 Very much so. 
   
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Do most of the main characters have some form of decision-making power?
  (And is the characters’ boss or bosses also part of the cast, so that major
  decisions will not be made by non-regulars?) 
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 In different ways. 
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Balanced: Do
  the members of the ensemble balance each other out? 
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Whether this is a
  premise or episodic pilot, is there one point-of-view who needs this world
  explained (who may or may not be the hero)? 
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 Walt knows the chemistry and Jesse knows the
  business, so they both have to explain their expertise to the other. 
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Does it take some effort for the POV character to extract other
  characters’ backstories? 
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 Yes, Walt and Jesse remain tight-lipped
  with each other. When Jesse demands to know Walt’s deal, Walt just says, “I’m
  awake.” 
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Are the
  non-3-dimensional characters impartially polarized into head, heart and gut
  (or various forms of 2-way or 4-way polarization)? 
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 Walt and Jesse are 2-way polarized (formal,
  book-smart vs. crude, street-smart). 
  The rest are 3-way polarized for now Sky = head (constantly counting
  costs and calories), Walt Jr. = Heart, Hank = gut. (Each will become
  3-dimensional soon enough) 
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Does each member of
  the ensemble have a distinct metaphor family (different from the hero’s, even
  if they’re in the same profession)? 
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  Jesse: streets
  (in a faintly ridiculous way), Sky: mom-speak, Hank: right-wing-ese 
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Does each member of the ensemble have a different default personality
  trait? 
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  Jesse: sarcastic, Sky: disdainful, Walt Jr.: cheeky and
  frustrated, Hank: aggressive 
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Does each member of the ensemble have a different default argument
  tactic?   
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  Jesse: defensive lies, Sky: passive aggressive, Hank: humiliation
  and intimidation 
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Is there at least one prickly character who creates sparks whenever he or
  she appears? 
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 Yes, Hank and Marie 
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Part 4: Is
  the pilot episode a strong stand-alone story and good template for the
  ongoing series? (19/22)                                 
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Template:
  Does this match and/or establish the standard format of this type of series  
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Does the pilot have (or establish) the average length for its format? 
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 No. 
  It’s a full hour, which would be 18 minutes too long for basic
  cable.  This would imply that it
  was intended for pay-cable, but it was actually developed for FX.  They just demanded that the pilot run
  long, which Gilligan didn’t really have the clout for, but he demanded it and
  got it.   
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If this is intended for a form of commercial media, does the pilot have
  the right number of commercial breaks for its intended venue? 
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 No, because it runs long, it has fewer commercial
  breaks.  Again, he just demanded
  it and got away with it. 
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If this is intended for commercial TV, does every act end on a
  cliffhanger or escalation, especially the middle one (and, if not intended
  for commercial TV, does it still have escalations happening in roughly the
  same places, simply for narrative purposes)? 
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 Yes. 1: Walt collapses: 2: Walt proposes
  cooking to Jesse, 3: Walt beats up the bullies, 4: Walt beats up bullies. 
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Does the pilot establish the general time frame for most upcoming
  episodes of this series?  
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 This show had no general time-frame.  Episodes could cover one hour or
  several months.   
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Do all of the pilot’s storylines intercut believably within that time
  frame? 
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 There’s really just one storyline. 
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If this is a premise pilot, is the basic premise established by the
  midpoint, leaving time for a foreshortened typical episode story in the
  second half? 
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 Yes. 
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Pilot Story Fundamentals: Does the
  pilot episode have a strong story? 
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Does the pilot provide at least one satisfactory stand-alone story (even
  if that story is just the accomplishment of a mini-goal)? 
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 Yes, the first drug deal goes wrong and
  the dealers are killed. 
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Is this episode’s plot simple enough to spend more time on character than
  plot? 
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 It’s a big plot, but character still
  rules (it helps that there are no subplots)  We even have little “character-only” bits like the odd
  little scene where Walt tries to put his handicapped parking mirror-hanger in
  the glove compartment but the compartment won’t close.  Later we have a scene of just Walt
  tossing matches into his pool at twilight. 
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Is the pilot’s challenge something that is not just hard for the hero to
  do (an obstacle) but hard for the hero to want to do (a conflict)? 
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 Very much so. 
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First Half: Is the problem
  established in a way that reflects human nature? 
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Does the hero start out with a short-term goal for this episode? 
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 Not really, just get through the day. (This is
  why the flashforward is important. 
  He isn’t pushing towards a goal at first, so we need to see that he
  will have a goal thrust upon him.) 
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Does a troubling situation (episodic pilot) or major change in the status
  quo (premise pilot) develop near the beginning of the episode? 
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 Very much so: Cancer. 
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Does the hero eventually commit to dealing with this situation
  personally? 
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 Very much so. 
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Do the hero’s efforts quickly lead to an unforeseen conflict with another
  person? 
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 With just about everybody, but especially
  Crazy 8 and Emilio. 
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Does the hero try the easy way throughout the second quarter? 
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 He totally ignores his cancer diagnosis
  until the midpoint 
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Does this culminate in a major midpoint setback or escalation of the
  problem (whether or not there’s a commercial break)? 
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 The setbacks happen at the ¼ and ¾ points
  (cancer and the deal going bad) 
  At the midpoint escalation (propositioning Jesse) he is in control. 
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Second Half: Is the mini-goal
  resolved as the ongoing trouble escalates?  
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Does the hero try the hard way from this point on? 
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 Yes.  
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By halfway through, are character decisions driving the plot, rather than
  external plot complications? 
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 No, just the opposite.  The first half is mostly-character, the second half is
  mostly plot.  This works because
  it’s a serialized show, and we know that the emotional fallout of this plot
  can be picked up in the next episode. 
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Are the stakes increased as the pace increases and the motivation
  escalates? 
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 Very much so. 
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Does a further setback force the hero to adopt a wider view of the
  problem? 
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 Yes, he is almost killed and realizes
  that he too will have to become a murderer.  
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After that setback, does the hero finally commit to pursuing a corrected
  goal? 
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 Well, “corrected” is debatable, but it’s
  certainly a goal that will proactively solve some of his problems.  
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Before the final quarter of the story begins, (if not long before) has
  the hero switched to being proactive, instead of reactive? 
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 Very much so. 
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After the climax, does either the hero, the point of view character or a
  guest star have a personal revelation and/or life change, possibly revealed
  through reversible behavior? 
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 Yes. Reversible behavior: stands up to
  bully, has sex with wife.  
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Part 5: Is
  each scene the best it can be? (Walt confronts Jesse) (20/23) 
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The Set-Up: Does this scene begin with
  the essential elements it needs? 
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Were tense and/or
  hopeful (and usually false) expectations for this interaction established
  beforehand? 
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 We just saw Jesse fleeing, unhappy to be recognized
  by Walt.  Jesse is hiding his car
  and himself, and looking around fearfully.  He grabs a tire iron when he hears a noise. 
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Does the scene
  eliminate small talk and repeated beats by cutting out the beginning (or
  possibly even the middle)?  
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 No, it goes from the beginning. 
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Is this an intimidating
  setting that keeps characters active?  
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 Somewhat, Jesse’s wanted by the law and Walt won’t
  allow him to inside.  They’re
  crafting a criminal conspiracy in view of others.   
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Is one of the scene
  partners not planning to have this conversation (and quite possibly has
  something better to do)? 
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 Jesse definitely wasn’t. 
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Is there at least
  one non-plot element complicating the scene?  
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 Just a brief bit about who owns Jesse’s house, which
  pays off much later. 
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Does the scene
  establish its own mini-ticking-clock (if only through subconscious
  anticipation)? 
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 Jesse is desperate to get inside away for the cops
  but Walt is detaining him. 
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The Conflict: Do the conflicts play out
  in a lively manner?  
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Does this scene both
  advance the plot and reveal character? 
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 Both. 
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Are one or more
  characters in the scene emotionally affected by this interaction or action as
  the scene progresses? 
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 Not really, oddly enough.  They both play it real cool.   
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Does the audience
  have (or develop) a rooting interest in this scene (which may sometimes
  shift)? 
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 By this point, they’ve basically gotten us to
  approve of this step by Walt, which is pretty amazing. 
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Are two agendas
  genuinely clashing (rather than merely two personalities)? 
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 Yes. 
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Does the scene have
  both a surface conflict and a suppressed conflict (one of which is the
  primary conflict in this scene)? 
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 Surface conflict: Will Walt turn him in? Will Jesse
  let him join the business. Suppressed conflict:  
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Is the suppressed
  conflict (which may or may not come to the surface) implied through subtext
  (and/or called out by the other character)?  
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 Jesse calls him out, so he lays his cards on the
  table. 
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Are the characters
  cagy (or in denial) about their own feelings?  
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 No, they’re both quite open. 
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Do characters use
  verbal tricks and traps to get what they want, not just direct confrontation? 
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 It’s mostly direct confrontation, but Walt proves
  his point by lifting the tarp off Jesse’s car and showing the license
  plate.  Finally, he springs the
  big trap: “Either that, or I turn you in.” 
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Is there
  re-blocking, including literal push and pull between the scene partners
  (often resulting in just one touch)? 
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 Just a little. 
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Are objects given or
  taken, representing larger values? 
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 Jesse grabs a tire iron, Walt lifts the tarp and
  shows the license plate. 
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If this is a big
  scene, is it broken down into a series of mini-goals? 
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 First: get Jesse to relax, then get him to admit
  that he’s Captain Cook, then get him to accept the pitch. 
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The Outcome: Does this scene change the
  story going forward?  
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As a result of this
  scene, does at least one of the scene partners end up doing something that he
  or she didn’t intend to do when the scene began?  
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 Jesse agrees to partner up with Walt (right after
  the scene ends, presumably) 
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Does the outcome of
  the scene ironically reverse (and/or ironically fulfill) the original
  intention? 
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 Jesse was worried that Walt (the only person who saw
  him at the scene) would turn him in. 
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Are previously-asked
  questions answered? 
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 Who is Jesse? 
  Why did Walt want to go on the ride-along? 
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Are new questions
  posed that will be left unanswered for now? 
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 Will Jesse agree?  What the hell is Walt thinking? 
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Is the audience left
  with a growing hope and/or fear for what might happen next? (Not just in the
  next scene, but generally) 
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 Yes, the whole series concept is launched, with all
  of its volatile tension. 
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Does the scene cut
  out early, on a question (possibly to be answered instantly by the
  circumstances of the next scene)? 
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 ”Either that, or I turn you in.”  
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Part 6: Is this powerful
  dialogue? (14/15) 
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Empathetic: Is the dialogue true to
  human nature? 
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Does the writing
  demonstrate empathy for all of the characters? 
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 Not really.  The
  show would consistently have difficulty summoning up enough empathy for its
  other characters.  Hank and Marie
  eventually became easy to empathize with, but Sky (too cold) and Walt Jr.
  (too dopey) would frustrate even the show’s biggest fans. 
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Does each of the
  characters, including the hero, have a limited perspective? 
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 Very much so. 
  They’re all incapable of thinking outside their own needs. 
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Are the characters
  resistant to openly admitting their feelings (to others and even to
  themselves)?  
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 Very much so. 
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Do the characters
  avoid saying things they wouldn’t say? 
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 See Jesse and Walt’s discussions. 
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Do the characters
  listen poorly? 
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 Very much so. 
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Do the characters
  interrupt each other more often than not? 
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 Yes. 
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Specific: Is the dialogue specific to
  this world and each personality? 
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Does the dialogue
  capture the culturally-specific syntax of the characters (without necessarily
  attempting to replicate non-standard pronunciation)?  
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 Yes, the drug dealers have unique and entertaining
  syntax. 
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Does the dialogue
  capture the jargon of the profession and/or setting? 
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 Yes, both chemistry and crime. 
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Does the dialogue
  capture the tradecraft of the profession being portrayed? 
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 Yes.  
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Heightened: Is the dialogue more pointed
  and dynamic than real talk? 
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Is the dialogue more
  concise than real talk? 
 | 
  
 Yes.  
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Does the dialogue
  have more personality than real talk? 
 | 
  
 Yes.  
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Is there a minimum
  of commas in the dialogue (the lines are not prefaced with Yes, No, Well,
  Look, or the other character’s name)? 
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 Yes.  
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Do non-professor
  characters speak without dependent clauses, conditionals, or parallel
  construction? 
 | 
  
 Even the teacher/scientist doesn’t. 
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Is there one
  gutpunch scene, where the subtext falls away and the characters really lay
  into each other? 
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 The scene outside the credit union where Jesse
  confronts Walt. 
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Part 7: Does the pilot manage its tone
  to create and fulfill audience expectations? (10/10) 
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Genre and Mood: Does the series tap into
  pre-established expectations? 
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Does the series fit
  within one genre (or compatible sub-genres)? 
 | 
  
 Crime. 
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Are unrealistic
  genre-specific elements a big metaphor for a more common experience (not how
  life really is, but how life really feels)? 
 | 
  
 A mid-life crisis x 100. 
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Separate from the
  genre, does the pilot establish an overall mood for the series? 
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 Black comedy 
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If there are
  multiple storylines, do they establish the spectrum of moods available within
  that overall mood?  
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 There is only one storyline. 
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Is there a moment
  early on that establishes the type and level of jeopardy? 
 | 
  
 Yes, the flashforward establishes that this will be
  a kill-or-be-killed show. 
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Framing: Does the pilot set, reset,
  upset and ultimately exceed its own expectations? 
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Are there framing
  devices (flashforwards, framing sequences and/or first person narration) to
  set the mood, pose a dramatic question, and/or pose ongoing questions? 
 | 
  
 Yes, a flashforward. 
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Is there a dramatic
  question posed early on, which will establish in the audience’s mind which
  moment will mark the end of the pilot? 
   
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 Will Walt shoot some cops? 
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Does foreshadowing
  create anticipation and suspense (and refocus the audience’s attention on
  what’s important)? 
 | 
  
 Lots: coughing, big meth money on TV, etc. 
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Are set-up and
  pay-off used to dazzle the audience, distracting attention from plot
  contrivances? 
 | 
  
 Sort of: why on Earth does Jesse have a video
  camera.  Because we’ve seen the
  pay-off first, we don’t really notice that it doesn’t have a set-up. Also,
  Walt ordering Emilio to stop smoking and Emilio blowing the smoke in Walt’s
  face makes that seem like its own beat, rather than an excuse to have a fire
  and force Walt onto the road. 
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Is the dramatic
  question of the pilot episode’s plot answered near the end of the story? 
 | 
  
 Yes, he doesn’t shoot any cops…for now. 
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Part 8: Does
  the pilot create a meaningful ongoing theme? (13/14)  
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Pervasive:
  Is the theme interwoven into many aspects of the show? 
 | 
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Does the ensemble as a whole have a unique philosophy about how to fill
  their role (and competition from an allied force with a different
  philosophy)? 
 | 
  
 Walt and Jesse commit themselves to a
  pure product, different from everything else out there. 
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Does the pilot have a statement of philosophy and/or theme, usually
  either at the beginning or ¾ of the way in. (Sometimes this will be the
  ensemble’s stated statement of philosophy, sometimes this merely be the
  implied theme of the series itself.) 
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 ”Chemistry is the study of change.” 
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Can the show’s
  overall ongoing theme be stated in the form of a classic good vs. good (or
  evil vs. evil) dilemma? 
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 Bad vs. bad: Underpaid teachers and overpriced
  health care vs. drug dealing. 
  Which is worse?   
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Throughout the
  pilot, do the characters have to choose between goods, or between evils,
  instead of choosing between good and evil? 
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 Not really. 
  There aren’t a lot of tough decisions here.  Walt’s uniquely bizarre personality causes him to make
  decisions difficult that shouldn’t actually be difficult: not telling his
  family about cancer, not standing up to his wife, etc.  
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Are the storylines in the pilot thematically linked (preferably in an
  indirect, subtle way)?  
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 Just one storyline. 
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Are small details
  throughout the pilot tied into the theme? 
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 Everywhere Walt looks he sees symbols of
  emasculation: his fake-bacon wilts, he can’t hold the gun upright, wiping the
  car forces his head to the ground, etc.  
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Will the heroes grapple with new moral gray areas in each episode? 
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 Yes, is there really such a thing as
  “pure” drug dealing?  Is it worth
  it to lie to your family in order to provide for them? 
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Grounded:
  Do the stakes ring true to the world of the audience? 
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Does the series set-up reflect the way
  the world works? 
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 Very much so. 
  The physical, emotional, and economic challenges of drug manufacture
  will be ever-present.  
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Does the series have
  authentic things to say about this type of setting? 
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 Very much so. 
   
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Does the ongoing
  concept include twinges of real life national pain? 
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 Very much so. 
  The health-care crisis, underpaid teachers, etc. 
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Are these issues
  presented in a way that avoids moral hypocrisy? 
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 Very much so. 
  The next two episodes brutally rub Walt’s nose in the murders he’s
  committed. 
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Do all of the
  actions in the pilot have real consequences? 
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 Very much so. 
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Untidy:
  Is the dilemma ultimately irresolvable? 
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Do the characters
  refuse (or fail) to synthesize the meaning of the pilot episode’s story,
  forcing the audience to do that? 
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 There is no discussion. 
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Does the end of the
  pilot leave the thematic dilemma wide open and irresolvable? 
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 Very much so. 
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Total Score: 117/133

The opening teaser sequence of the pilot is a particular masterpiece.
ReplyDeleteStarting with the imagery of the pants falling gently through the air then cutting to the lunacy of the smoking RV bouncing across the desert, followed by the deadly chaos of the inside of the vehicle, mysteries pile upon mysteries, told through ironic image montage. Then the ludicrousness of Walt in his tighty-whities and the wrenching emotion of his "not a confession" into the video camera of a seemingly timid and frightened man, concluding with sirens and THE GUN. Slam to title card.
Holy frijoles.
Constantly in motion, full of surprises and mysteries, emotionally involving, and visually striking. Ironies and honest emotion play off of one another to involve us, while mysteries leave us burning to know what happened to get to that point. Hell to the yeah.
Is that the greatest opening teaser of all time? I'd vote yes.
I actually think that, exciting as it is to watch and near checklist-perfect as it is on paper, the show doesn't find its true self, its tone and rhythm, for a few episodes -- but, hell, that's largely true of many a great series.
ReplyDeleteFor greatest opening of all time? I'm still all in for TWIN PEAKS, which creates its fascinating world with total authority. There's not a single misstep in that pilot.
I'm curious if Matt's seen BETTER CALL SAUL yet and has any provisional thoughts about how the spin-off is setting itself up and coming into its own?
Harvey: Yes, I'd agree that it's quite possibly the greatest.
ReplyDeleteJS: No, I haven't seen SAUL yet, but I hear good things and I need to get caught up. (One Facebook friend called it the first ever accurate law show.)
So I'm re-watching and analyzing this pilot.
ReplyDeleteAt 39 minutes, doctor's office, confirmation of terminal cancer. (Ticking Clocks, Whiff of Death).
Walt focusing on and pointing out the mustard stain; is that "subtext" I'm guessing? Talking about one thing, so as to avoid the emotional impact of the actual discussion? Or is that another principle at play?
Also the whole exchange portrays Walt's detached frame of awareness, something we see several times throughout the pilot. (Strange sound cues, blunted dialogue sound, extreme closeups, filmed visually disoriented, etc.) Is there a principle / name for that? (I don't believe the script really addresses it, except for example on p 20 -- "The BUZZ is back in his head" -- so it was largely a direction / editing decision it seems.)